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Thematic paperUnderstanding Obesity in Childhood
Ha Nguyen
California State of Fullerton Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Good job on your title page
CAS 300
Professor: Matuzak
November 19, 2020
Understanding Obesity in Childhood
Obesity is the accumulation of fat in fatty tissues, which in turn leads to adverse health complications. Also, obesity is one of the severe problems in today’s society that happens in children. Obesity in childhood is increasing every year because of so many causes. It could be caused by genetics, the lack of eating diet, and the lack of reduction in physical. (Krushnapriya et al., 2015). Obesity in childhood is concerned with developing children’s health, which increases the risk to patients such as hypertension, coronary artery, diabetes, osteoarthritis, gallstones, fatty liver, and some cancers. Also, fat in children does not stop growing when they get older. High fat is leading to severe psychological effects in children, such as low self-esteem, discouragement, sociability, and poor learning. Therefore, obesity in childhood can be a source of future health disasters. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: due to so many causes. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Which cancers? Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Is the underlined sentence your thesis or is it the sentence after4? Make sure your thesis is the last sentence of your introductory paragraph
People usually wonder why some people can eat anything and still not gain weight—however, people who eat just a little and gain weight a lot. The reason is that your value depends on how many calories your body consumes and how many you burn up calories. Furthermore, genes might affect food cravings and digestive systems ( Harvard Health Publishing, 2009). According to Bernard F et al. ( 2013), children who have (obese) parents obese have a higher risk of developing obesity. At age 17, children with obese parents have a rate of obesity three times than children with non-obese parents. Among obese children, about eighty percent of children have one parent obese, and thirty percent have both obese parents. A baby’s birth weight can also affect whether a baby will become obese later on. Babies who weigh more than eight pounds at birth are more likely to become obese than babies with an average birthweight. Genetics affects a hormone involved in fat regulation called leptin resistance. Leptin is a hormone that reduces appetite and controls weight by signaling the brain to eat less when the body fat stores are too high. The problem is that leptin doesn’t work as it should in obese people. Leptin can’t signal the brain to eat less. This control is lost – this condition is called leptin resistance and is thought to be the genetic predisposition to obesity ( Hormone Health Network, 2018). Children who are genetically overweight and obese have a sluggish metabolic rate (take longer to burn calories) or have more significant cravings, making weight loss difficult. Hence, obesity is the result of genetics. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Make sure your topic sentences are clear and in the correct order. For example for paragraph #1,…High fat is leading to a poor self-esteem in children. Then go on from there describing how high fat is leading to poor self-esteem throughout your paragraph. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Sentence is hard to follow Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Add citation
Eating unhealthy foods regularly, such as fast foods, baked goods, and snacks can easily make children gain weight. Sweet desserts can also cause weight gain, and sugary drinks, including. Fruit juices, are the culprits of obesity in children (CDC, 2019). Besides, people in some communities have limited resources to access supermarkets. They will choose convenient foods that do not spoil quickly, such as frozen meat and canned cakes ( Aitsi-Selmi, A. 2015). According to a survey by the Institute of Social Medicine Research (ISMS) in 2013, up to 30% of mothers do not know their children are overweight, 15% of mothers with obese children still want their babies to gain more weight. Most moms always think healthy kids have more value than unhealthy kids. They often give the child a lot of food to prevent the lack of energy each time the child is sick; the mother pressures the child to eat or provides the child with a variety of supplement foods but micronutrient poverty. Thus, parents indirectly bring unhealthy nutrition that makes their children overweight. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Add comma after snacks Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Sentences are hard to follow Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Add citations
Lack of physical activity is another crucial factor associated with obesity in childhood. When you consume a large source of calories but don’t operate to burn them, that causes excess energy to accumulate in the form of obese fat ( Krushnapriya et al., 2015). Children are now having a habit of inactivity and are often today’s youth. They tend to relax by watching TV, surfing the internet, and playing computer games instead of exercising. Their parents choose traveling by motorbike or car instead of choosing a bike or walking – are all at risk of obesity. The less active they are, the fewer calories they will burn. In addition, physical activity affects how the human hormone works, which affects the way the body processes food. Several studies have shown that physical activity can help keep insulin levels steady, and unstable insulin levels can lead to weight gain. In addition to an appropriate diet, they should increase physical activity to drain excess energy. The amount of calories burned depends on the type of exercise, the duration, and the intensity of the movement. Parents or teachers should allow children to exercise at least 30 minutes a day with necessary activities such as jogging, cycling, swimming, etc. The more frequent and long-term exercise, the more significant impact on obesity prevention. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Was this part of your thesis? Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Add citations
The cause of obesity in childhood is by genetic factors, factors about eating, and physical habits. Therefore, to prevent the risk of obesity, people need to maintain children’s body weight at a reasonable level by balancing the number of calories you eat through food with the energy consumed through physical activity. Parents should learn about what foods to eat, which foods to avoid, and the right exercises to prevent obesity, protect your children’s health and quality of life. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Restate your thesis and do not add new information Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Make sure you add citations for this piece of information or else it will count as plagirism. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Make sure your paper is the full 3 pages
References Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Put citations in alphabetical order
Aitsi-Selmi, A. (2015). Households with a stunted child and obese mother: Trends and child
feeding practices in a middle-income country, 1992–2008. Maternal and Child Health Journal, 19(6), 1284–1291.http://dx.doi.org.lib-proxy.fullerton.edu/10.1007/s10995-014-1634-5
Bernard, Fuemmeler. Cheryl A, Nancy, & Truls. ( 2013). Parental Obesity Moderates the Relationship Appetitive Traits and Weight. Obesity (Silver Spring), 21(4), 815-823.https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3671382/#__ffn_sectitle
Center for disease control and prevention (2019). Define Childhood Obesity, Division of
Nutrition, July 3, 2018. https://www.cdc.gov/obesity/childhood/defining.html
Krushnapriya, Bishnupriya, Ashok, Choudury, Nighat, Raman, & Ajeet. (2015). Childhood
Obesity: Causes and Consequences. Journal of Family Medicine and Primary Care. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC4408699/#__ffn_sectitle
Harvard Health Publishing. (2009). Why People Become Overweight. Harvard Health
Publishing Harvard Medical School. https://www.health.harvard.edu/staying-healthy/why-people-become-overweight
Hormone Health Network. ( 2018). What is Leptin?. Endocrine Society. Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Add the hanging indent
https://www.hormone.org/your-health-and-hormones/glands-and-hormones-a-to-z/hormones/leptin
You did a great job for your rough draft Nguyen! Just make sure you fix your topic sentences for each paragraph, make your essay 3 pages long, fix your reference page, and work on your conclusion a bit more. You got this! Great effort!
Comment by Vanessa Ortega: Make sure you add the rubric
Thematic Paper Grading Criteria
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M
A
F
A correctly formatted APA title page is included.
X
Paper reaches a minimum of 3 full pages of content and a maximum of 5 pages
X
The introduction is interesting and ends with a thesis statement.
X
The thesis statement is clear and substantive and reflects the content of the paper.
X
Topic sentences are content rich, use the same “buzz” words as the thesis statement, and are in the correct order.
X
The content paragraphs begin with a topic sentence and develops its idea; the paragraph stays on task by explaining, describing, and exemplifying.
X
The goal of the paper is to inform and explain, using research evidence to back every claim; the author does not express opinions or advocate.
X
The author discusses the research findings with accuracy and in adequate detail.
X
The author synthesizes the information presented (i.e., makes connections among the different sources).
X
The author paraphrases the research effectively and has not plagiarized from the original sources. Any plagiarism of sources will result in a zero on the paper and disciplinary action.
X
The conclusion summarizes and integrates the main points but does not introduce new ideas.
X
APA Style is followed for in-text citations. All citations are referenced, and all references are cited in the text.
X
APA Style is followed for references.
X
Correct grammar is demonstrated.
X
Correct punctuation is demonstrated.
X
Typos, spelling errors, and formatting errors are avoided.
X
E = Exceeds expectations; M = Meets expectations; A = Approaches expectations;
F = Fails to meet expectations
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RubricResearchPaper20201.docx
Thematic paper
Thematic Paper Grading CriteriaE
M
A
F
A correctly formatted APA title page is included.
Paper reaches a minimum of 3 full pages of content and a maximum of 5 pages
The introduction is interesting and ends with a thesis statement.
The thesis statement is clear and substantive and reflects the content of the paper.
Topic sentences are content rich, use the same “buzz” words as the thesis statement, and are in the correct order.
The content paragraphs begin with a topic sentence and develops its idea; the paragraph stays on task by explaining, describing, and exemplifying.
The goal of the paper is to inform and explain, using research evidence to back every claim; the author does not express opinions or advocate.
The author discusses the research findings with accuracy and in adequate detail.
The author synthesizes the information presented (i.e., makes connections among the different sources).
The author paraphrases the research effectively and has not plagiarized from the original sources. Any plagiarism of sources will result in a zero on the paper and disciplinary action.
The conclusion summarizes and integrates the main points but does not introduce new ideas.
APA Style is followed for in-text citations. All citations are referenced, and all references are cited in the text.
APA Style is followed for references.
Correct grammar is demonstrated.
Correct punctuation is demonstrated.
Typos, spelling errors, and formatting errors are avoided.
E = Exceeds expectations; M = Meets expectations; A = Approaches expectations;
F = Fails to meet expectations
RUBRIC
QUALITY OF RESPONSE NO RESPONSE POOR / UNSATISFACTORY SATISFACTORY GOOD EXCELLENT Content (worth a maximum of 50% of the total points) Zero points: Student failed to submit the final paper. 20 points out of 50: The essay illustrates poor understanding of the relevant material by failing to address or incorrectly addressing the relevant content; failing to identify or inaccurately explaining/defining key concepts/ideas; ignoring or incorrectly explaining key points/claims and the reasoning behind them; and/or incorrectly or inappropriately using terminology; and elements of the response are lacking. 30 points out of 50: The essay illustrates a rudimentary understanding of the relevant material by mentioning but not full explaining the relevant content; identifying some of the key concepts/ideas though failing to fully or accurately explain many of them; using terminology, though sometimes inaccurately or inappropriately; and/or incorporating some key claims/points but failing to explain the reasoning behind them or doing so inaccurately. Elements of the required response may also be lacking. 40 points out of 50: The essay illustrates solid understanding of the relevant material by correctly addressing most of the relevant content; identifying and explaining most of the key concepts/ideas; using correct terminology; explaining the reasoning behind most of the key points/claims; and/or where necessary or useful, substantiating some points with accurate examples. The answer is complete. 50 points: The essay illustrates exemplary understanding of the relevant material by thoroughly and correctly addressing the relevant content; identifying and explaining all of the key concepts/ideas; using correct terminology explaining the reasoning behind key points/claims and substantiating, as necessary/useful, points with several accurate and illuminating examples. No aspects of the required answer are missing. Use of Sources (worth a maximum of 20% of the total points). Zero points: Student failed to include citations and/or references. Or the student failed to submit a final paper. 5 out 20 points: Sources are seldom cited to support statements and/or format of citations are not recognizable as APA 6th Edition format. There are major errors in the formation of the references and citations. And/or there is a major reliance on highly questionable. The Student fails to provide an adequate synthesis of research collected for the paper. 10 out 20 points: References to scholarly sources are occasionally given; many statements seem unsubstantiated. Frequent errors in APA 6th Edition format, leaving the reader confused about the source of the information. There are significant errors of the formation in the references and citations. And/or there is a significant use of highly questionable sources. 15 out 20 points: Credible Scholarly sources are used effectively support claims and are, for the most part, clear and fairly represented. APA 6th Edition is used with only a few minor errors. There are minor errors in reference and/or citations. And/or there is some use of questionable sources. 20 points: Credible scholarly sources are used to give compelling evidence to support claims and are clearly and fairly represented. APA 6th Edition format is used accurately and consistently. The student uses above the maximum required references in the development of the assignment. Grammar (worth maximum of 20% of total points) Zero points: Student failed to submit the final paper. 5 points out of 20: The paper does not communicate ideas/points clearly due to inappropriate use of terminology and vague language; thoughts and sentences are disjointed or incomprehensible; organization lacking; and/or numerous grammatical, spelling/punctuation errors 10 points out 20: The paper is often unclear and difficult to follow due to some inappropriate terminology and/or vague language; ideas may be fragmented, wandering and/or repetitive; poor organization; and/or some grammatical, spelling, punctuation errors 15 points out of 20: The paper is mostly clear as a result of appropriate use of terminology and minimal vagueness; no tangents and no repetition; fairly good organization; almost perfect grammar, spelling, punctuation, and word usage. 20 points: The paper is clear, concise, and a pleasure to read as a result of appropriate and precise use of terminology; total coherence of thoughts and presentation and logical organization; and the essay is error free. Structure of the Paper (worth 10% of total points) Zero points: Student failed to submit the final paper. 3 points out of 10: Student needs to develop better formatting skills. The paper omits significant structural elements required for and APA 6th edition paper. Formatting of the paper has major flaws. The paper does not conform to APA 6th edition requirements whatsoever. 5 points out of 10: Appearance of final paper demonstrates the student’s limited ability to format the paper. There are significant errors in formatting and/or the total omission of major components of an APA 6th edition paper. They can include the omission of the cover page, abstract, and page numbers. Additionally the page has major formatting issues with spacing or paragraph formation. Font size might not conform to size requirements. The student also significantly writes too large or too short of and paper 7 points out of 10: Research paper presents an above-average use of formatting skills. The paper has slight errors within the paper. This can include small errors or omissions with the cover page, abstract, page number, and headers. There could be also slight formatting issues with the document spacing or the font Additionally the paper might slightly exceed or undershoot the specific number of required written pages for the assignment. 10 points: Student provides a high-caliber, formatted paper. This includes an APA 6th edition cover page, abstract, page number, headers and is double spaced in 12’ Times Roman Font. Additionally, the paper conforms to the specific number of required written pages and neither goes over or under the specified length of the paper. GET THIS PROJECT NOW BY CLICKING ON THIS LINK TO PLACE THE ORDER
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